And 没错,写作老师最想消灭的英语单词就是它

平时修改作文,最让我抓狂的是这样的句子:

From the passage we know that many archaeologists think that the financial support for research is not enough and the money is usually given by the government.

每当我遇见这样的句子,真的想把 and 从英语字典中消灭!

Eradicate “and” from English! 

(eradicate: destroy completely, 彻底毁灭)

你是不是在纳闷,这个句子没语法错误,没毛病啊。

确实,

从语法的角度来看这个句子 100 分。

但是,

写作是思考的载体。

我们写作,不能只追求语法完美。

正如生活,不能只追求解决温饱。

(鸡汤来袭,大家快躲开!)

这篇作文讲述考古学学科不景气,考古学家靠政府的科研基金难以维生,所以需要寻求其他资金来源,例如建筑公司的咨询费。

原句重点在于这个并列句:the financial support for research is not enough and the money is usually given by the government.

financial support is insufficient 和 research funding comes from the government 这两个信息哪一个更重要?

没错,句子的重点应该落在 underfunding, 而 money coming from the government 主要在修饰前面的 “financial support” — “money” 和 “financial support” 是一回事。

也就是说,

“financial support for research is not enough” 和 “the money is usually given by the government” — 资金不够和资金主要来自政府 — “资金来自政府” 是在修饰 “资金不够” — 两者并不是并列关系!

不是并列关系却选用并列句式,那叫滥用 and!

(心疼 and 一分钟)

所以 …… 应该怎么改?

把第二个信息作为插入语,例如:

—> From the passage we know that many archaeologists think that the financial support for research, which is usually given by the government, is not enough.

—> From the passage we know that many archaeologists think that the financial support for research, which mainly comes from the government, falls short of supporting many archaeologists.

改完顺眼好多有没有?!

读完以上文字,你不知不觉学到 5 个地道表达:

eradicate = destroy completely

insufficient = not enough = inadequate

underfunding n. (underfund v.) = insufficient funding

fall short of (sth./doing sth.) = be less than what you need, expected, or hoped for, or to fail to reach a satisfactory standard

sustain = provide support and strength

当你再次碰到 “and” 被放到放到不属于他的地方,你知道怎么改了吧?快来练一波吧!

1) Scientists are conducting research on a kind of crops that is unattractive to the pests and these crops do not harm birds.

2) After my parents brought me a phone and I started using it to assist my study.

3) The game Minecraft helped me to relax and stop thinking about the complex and perplexing math problems.

4) Those luxurious cars have great performance and exceed the cars that are cheap.

5) Scientists discovered the fossils of Pterosaurs and found that they had fur.

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